Why is it that boredom
Is the push that I need
To write anything of substance?
Or rather that tired
Sensation of thought
To stir up creative silt...
Like to sit at the edge
Of the pier, sun-tired
And notice an elusive flash
That jostles the brain
Imagination bulldozer
For an innovative foxhole
well...
7 comments:
oh man. really good, i like :)
what about "stirring, sitting and noticing" instead...seems to flow better in the progressive... ??
Don't listen to cassie. She likes participles too much. :)No honestly, i don't think you should change any of it. It totally captures the movement in the mind. Awesome.
yea, katie is right. I love infinitives, and cass needs to accept that her participles are to bland for this little piece of poesy.
lol i love how we are all telling each other that the other person doesn't know what they are talking about hehe...
Fine then.... what about "As if to sit" then?
because I mean like in its simile form, not in a supposition.
reread, and had to say again how i love it....still magic for me
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